Unpacking
I finally moved to my fiance's house.
Now I'm unpacking my boxes.
On moving day, I was excited and I wasn't able to stop unpacking, and he said "you should prepare for work tomorrow!", so I stopped.
The next day, after working, I was exhausted and sleepy.
I shouldn't push myself too hard, since that might ruin my health.
Unpacking ネイティブの添削結果
Ifinaly → finally
fiancee = female
fiance = male
luggage → boxes
luggage = usually means suitcases and other bags that you carry on a trip.
The day moving, → On moving day,
The next day, after working, I'm exhausted and got sleepy.
I shouldn't have pushed myself too hard and ruined my health.
→ I shoudn't push my self so hard, since that might ruin my health.
ruined my health = you have a disease which you will never recover from.
Hida-Takayama ネイティブの添削結果
Takayama is like small Kyoto と表現したら、
Takayama is like a small version of Kyoto と修正されました。
Sceanery に 'a' はつかないと指摘されました。
The famous food is Hida-meat と表現したら、
A famous food served there is Hida-meat と修正されました。
I recommend you to have a car or rent one. と表現したら、
I recommend that you go there by car. と修正されました。
One hour → An hour
Hida-Takayama
I'd like to visit Hida-Takayama (飛騨高山) once again.
You can take the highway bus from Osaka to Takayama and it costs about 3,000 yen.
Takayama is like a small version of Kyoto and appeals to the emotions of Japanese people.
You can enjoy good scenery and traditional crafts.
A famous food served there is Hida-meat (飛騨牛), a dish prepared from edible wild grasses, a sweet and salty miso etc.
If you want enjoy Hida-Takayama more, I recommend that you go there by car.
You can go Gero Hot Springs (下呂温泉); it takes about thirty minutes.
Besides, you can go a limestone cave, It takes about 30 minutes to get there.
Moreover, You can visit Sirakawa-go (白川郷), the heavy snowfall area; it takes about an hour.
Hida-Takayama is an attractive place!
PS : This book, under below, is very useful for keeping a diary!
I recommend it to you.
↓ネイティブの添削結果↓
Art Club ネイティブの添削結果
I used to join an art club.
I used to participate in an art club.
に書き替えられました。
"Join a club" means to become a member of that club.
だそうです。
私は実際に美術部員だったので、Joinでいいと思いますが、もしかしたら、be used to と相性が悪いのかもしれません。
Then I wanted to go to the an art university but this dream didn't come true.
an の冠詞を付け足されました。
Please check them out!
it から、them に変わりました。
"paintings"にかかるからだそうです。
こんな簡単な文章でもこんなに添削が入るなんて、私の英語はまだまだだなあとひしひしと感じます。
Art Club
I used to join an art club.
Then I wanted to go to the an art university but this dream didn't come true.
You can see my paintings from the link.
Please check them out!
↓ここに至るまでのネイティブの添削結果です↓
I'm Overweight.
My fiancee and I have decided to have our wedding in June next year, so we think that I should go on a diet.
However, it's harder to lose weight now than it was before.
I suppose my metabolism is slower.
I gained weight--about 13kg!!-- with a free box lunch and lack of exercize last year.
Besides, I need to remove cellulite, but I can't do it by myself.
Anyway, I'm obese that I can't handle it by myself.
After discussing it, we decided that I'm going to get a slimming treatment.
PS : This book, under below, is very useful for keeping a diary!
I recommend it to you.
